Demetri Saint Randrac

Lord Gluzman, been awhile since i've been able to read one of your songs. Expression v. conformity. Idk..perhaps since we are dealing with a song here, some rules intended for ...

Demetri, you've done it again. Those commas are not meant to be there. Take them out. They're completely ridiculous. Who, threw the rock, that landed, on Jim? The rock, whose ...

Six months later, I think, maybe I could've done without the commas. Hmm, who would've thunk?

I can't help when reading a response but think to myself: "These people are wrong and I'm right. Don't they see this? Whats the problem here?" But then, I think ...

Kyllorac, if I try to see this from your point of view, it makes a little sense. You don't suggest complete removal of the commas, rather a different placement. This ...

I see what you mean about the periods, I had thought when composing this that there should be some. But you are right in one regard, to post where I ...

(SIGH) I hope my exasperation is evident. The commas are there for a reason. Would you otherwise think they showed up by accident? Some freakish, heavily overlooked mistake? God no. ...

(Yes the commas are supposed to be here, please pause at each one. I shouldn't have to tell anyone to do this.) Who? Who, threw the rock, that landed, on ...

Wonderful, you might be well on your way to being a composer someday-if you keep writing works like this. I listen to opera and symphonies and...symphonic rock (Nightwish anyone?). That ...

Who should know the deepest despair But I, I who have been there Who have seen Hell while still confined to this world! Who hast...felt...hell in this world And it ...

Somewhat lost in the negativity of your "critique", I find it hard to implement the changes you have suggested. However, perhaps that is due in part to the fact that ...

I am really grateful for you review Stella. A lot of it made sense and I see how much can be changed/altered. However, there are some things I must clear ...

Raimunda, I simply adore this poem. It may just be the best I've ever read as far as honesty, emotion, and reality are concerned. At the same time I really ...

There was this one Supposedly sainted Amidst all the rest Who were thoroughly tainted And all he wanted Was for the world to be pure Unfortunately for some Evil was ...

Just an overview.. I don't know how I came across this, but somehow I did. But thats not at all bad, I really enjoyed it. All the more because I ...